Class 5 Session 2: Story pitch video
The file is 8 min. long and 15mb! Making it smaller was screwing up the audio so please bare with the download time.
Its very important for me to get your comments on these ideas, tell me which one you like the most and if you can add why, even better!
posted by Pochat at 11:12 AM
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I think that the first, third and last ones the best. The hole in the wall one is cool because you can get lots of mischeivous expressions and have fun with the different interactions between the two guys. The first one I think is cool because you have lots of space for crazy actions! I like the third one the best still, but I do think that maybe you should have him pull out his hair on the third try (the rule of threes!!) It would give you more time to show him getting frustrated with the stray hair!
Hole in the wall is the story that succeeds the most for me, seems complete.
Mario,
I like the guy getting ready for the wedding because people are too serious and they should stop trying to be so perfect all the time! and it's funny.
Then, the kid and construction guy.
Creo que la mejor historia es la del pelo. La moraleja queda más disfrazada por el golpe cómico del final; a mí personalmente no me gustan las moralinas sin ingenio. pero tu historia del pelo sí tiene ingenio, es sencilla y da pie a desarrollar las expresiones concentrándote en un solo personaje y un plano fijo como si nosotros, el público, estuvieramos al lado del espejo. Sugeriría cambiar la situación y utilizar el sonido en off de un escándalo tremendo al otro lado de la puerta como si el tío estuviera en el cuarto de baño de un apartamento donde se celebra una despedida de soltero o algo así. También podría al principio entrar en el escenario por esa puerta y que se atisbe un gran jolgorio de gente divirtiéndose. Así dejas claro desde el prinicipio la importancia de estar guapo para la ocasión porque lo de la boda depende de la imaginación de la gente.
Un abrazo,
I like the best: hole in the wall the best.
The story is funny but your gestures are funnier!
You look also more dynamic, with more energy and why not? like a youg artist!
Best,
Great ideas! I liked "The Groom" and "The Hole in the Wall" the most.
The Groom was great because he's being so vain plucking hairs and the viewer wants something bad to happen to him.
The Hole in the Wall is also a great pitch because of the one who tries to pull a fast ones end up falling on his face.
I think these are all great ideas. My advice would be to choose the one that you can vision to be the best.
- Paul
Hey mario... for some reason I like the hole in the wall the best. Its fun, its simple, and it can be quite entertaining. The fun will be how each character reacts after each time they look through the hole.
Thats my 2 cents worth. See you in the Rain Mario!
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